What you're about to read is the first soon-to-be-published work by the young author Jason Alexander Carmona. He wrote this as a fun "challenge", to see if he could come up with an original story based on some prompts his mom and dad picked for him. He quickly began to develop a story with elements that didn't necessarily fit, but because of the "challenge" he had to make it work; we think he succeeded. But it's not up to us to judge, it's up to the audience to say if he did a good job or not. So, we decided to post his story for everyone to read, after you read it; please leave him your thoughts so he can get his first taste of what being an author is all about. PS. This story is going to eventually be published as an illustrated children's book. The Endless Forest There was once an endless forest, dark and mysterious like the night; evil dwells there. There were giant bats hiding there as well as well as dangerous pirate. he had a patch over his eyes, long dirty hair, tattered clothes, a sword, two pistols... and very teeth! He wasn't too bright but he was astute, he talked loudly and often but never said too much about things he cared about; like his treasure. But the pirate wasn't the only one living in that forest, two mean witches lived there as well. One of the witches had just one ear, the other had none; nobody knows why. Very few people go into the forest these days, the witches scare them away which makes the pirate very happy; less people go wondering in the forest... less chances of anyone finding his treasure! Oh, remember the giant bats hiding in the woods? Those were the witches' pets! Not surprising. So the witches hid alongside their giant pet bats and walked the forest looking for food and scaring people away, they didn't want anyone to know where they lived; or what they did. The witches were bad, the giant bats were bad, the pirate was bad; but the forest was good. That's another reason why the witches and the giant bats hid away, the forest would hurt them because it knew they were evil; and he wanted them gone! Just outside The Endless Forest lived a good man, someone kind to humans and animals alike, someone who even the plants recognized and protected; The Ancient Emperor! He was once a great sorcerer who protected travelers trying to get across The Endless Forest and who fell victims to the evil witches. The sorcerer had two loyal companions, a red monkey and a dragon! The dragon had saved the monkey from snake years ago, breathing fire and scaring the snake enough that it let go of the red monkey; after that day the two were inseparable. Legend has it the red monkey only eats a special kind of apples that only grow in The Endless Forest, so even though it's very dangerous for anyone to go through the woods; the red monkey has to go or he'll starve. So the dragon found out about this and he gets apples for the red monkey every day and brings them to him. They're best of friends. On one occasion, while the dragon was picking apples for the red monkey, the witches trapped the dragon and if it wasn't for the sorcerer it would've been fatal for the dragon. Thankfully the sorcerer is very powerful so he could fight off the witches wh ran away into the woods not to be seen again for a long time. The sorcerer's power comes from a powerful warlock named Jayden The Great! Jayden The Great was slain in battle fighting the evil witches when one of them attacked him from behind, but before dying he transferred his power to the sorcerer and from that day forward; the sorcerer became the protector of the land. The End?
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Francisco Rivera
4/13/2020 10:06:09 pm
Awesome story Jason. Fascinating and scary sometimes while fun at the same time.
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Dennis Carter
4/14/2020 04:36:22 am
It was a great story! With being such a great author & your father being a wonderful artist. I can see a father and son duo in the making.
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Godmommy
4/14/2020 05:36:41 am
It was awesome! I absolutely loved it! I'm so proud of you! I'm ready for another one!😀😘😘!!!!
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Kelly Frank
4/14/2020 10:47:16 am
What an amazing and intriguing story! Wonderful job Jason! Hope to see more from you! Happy birthday and keep up the good work!!
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Dafne IrizarryCruz
4/14/2020 03:59:32 pm
Such a great story. Very young and talented writer! Keep up the awesome work!!!
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Meralis
4/14/2020 10:03:33 pm
It was a great story, keep doing it and don't stop!!!
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Anthony Illa
4/15/2020 10:30:38 pm
Hello Jason,
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JESÚS CARMONA
8/31/2020 04:47:36 pm
TREMENDA HISTORIA . FELICIDADES JASON .
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